Another pretty awesome adventure, though it didn't feel as gung-ho as "Thunder".

Pros:
Solid story-telling, with a cliffhanger ending to boot.
Creations are detailed and placed into their environment deliberately and with skill.
It plays well from start to finish.
Music is pretty good and well-placed.
The transport sequence works fine...except...

Cons/What should be improved:
...you should let the player know that he/she should be on top of the transport BEFORE it starts. (Yeah, that's me thinking ahead for you. )
Spelling mistakes: the word "field" is mispelled numerous times
The word "that's" and "ship's" are missing aprostrophes in act 2 and field is mispelled once again. Deligence is not an easy word to spell (and I think I mispelled it there too) but it's not spelled correctly in act 2. You should use Microsoft Word for that baby. The fusion cell in act 2 could be placed better. (A bug can cause it to fall into a position where it cannot be retrieved.)
"Generators" mispelled in act 4
In one act you are KNOW as Andon, not KNOWN as Andon.
Power-ups are EVERYWHERE, just like the last one. I really think you should cut back on them some more.
I think the Conkrites could do with some chatter, to add to their character. (E.G: Frost Mech: "Eliminate the intruder." Or, "Terminate the incompetants!")

It all worked out okay for the most part, and it's a whole UNIVERSE better than a C&S or Easy Points mission, so I'll give you a 6 outta 10 for this one. Above average, but I can't help but feel it's a bit rushed.

Would you mind playing and critiquing this adventure, I FINALLY got it to work!
http://www.spore.com/sporepedia#qry=usr-AuraNovus%7C500423487504%3Asast-500440244928

Glen, released a new adventure in my New Earth series.

AuraNovus wrote:Another pretty awesome adventure, though it didn't feel as gung-ho as "Thunder".

Pros:
Solid story-telling, with a cliffhanger ending to boot.
Creations are detailed and placed into their environment deliberately and with skill.
It plays well from start to finish.
Music is pretty good and well-placed.
The transport sequence works fine...except...

Cons/What should be improved:
...you should let the player know that he/she should be on top of the transport BEFORE it starts. (Yeah, that's me thinking ahead for you. )
Spelling mistakes: the word "field" is mispelled numerous times
The word "that's" and "ship's" are missing aprostrophes in act 2 and field is mispelled once again. Deligence is not an easy word to spell (and I think I mispelled it there too) but it's not spelled correctly in act 2. You should use Microsoft Word for that baby. The fusion cell in act 2 could be placed better. (A bug can cause it to fall into a position where it cannot be retrieved.)
"Generators" mispelled in act 4
In one act you are KNOW as Andon, not KNOWN as Andon.
Power-ups are EVERYWHERE, just like the last one. I really think you should cut back on them some more.
I think the Conkrites could do with some chatter, to add to their character. (E.G: Frost Mech: "Eliminate the intruder." Or, "Terminate the incompetants!")

It all worked out okay for the most part, and it's a whole UNIVERSE better than a C&S or Easy Points mission, so I'll give you a 6 outta 10 for this one. Above average, but I can't help but feel it's a bit rushed.

Would you mind playing and critiquing this adventure, I FINALLY got it to work!
http://www.spore.com/sporepedia#qry=usr-AuraNovus%7C500423487504%3Asast-500440244928

6/10 seems a bit low, your standards are really high, but thank oyu very very much for playing and giving feeback , anyways I will add your adventure to my list

also tom, I will check it out soon

SpaceOgrelord wrote:I would really appreciate some feedback on Death and sky (the big picture in my signature), any of them you feel looks interesting, though it is 4 parts and understand if you start later you might be a little lost story wise.

Ok I will tell you what, I will play your whole series and review each individual part if you play and review my whole series...sound good?

Hmm alright.

SpaceOgrelord wrote:Hmm alright.

cool, unless someone is before you I will get to your missions ASAP

question for you guys, is the screen shot for storm not working? cause it seems to be down on my computer

Yeah, it's gone.

Jat371 wrote:Yeah, it's gone.

NOODLES!!!! that sucks, I will put it back up tomorrow then

Warning long post, tried to get rid of the wall of text feel but don't know if I succeeded; people who don't like to read can skip to the bottom and get the short versions.

FROST Review:

This has very little back story, you just land on the planet and walk along a road in severe need of leveling (if anything drove on that road it would probably do a nose dive into the pavement lol) and are referred to as a commander by the defender (the captain at the start is also named: Defender of Acropolan not commander). At this point I am kind of wondering where their other commander or acting leader is, or did they just get sent there to attack these people because they found out about the threatening frost tech or what. And what is a commander doing acting as an infiltrator/assassin anyways; I thought most armies had specially trained people for that and commanders just made sure the soldiers and tanks shot the right things and moved in an orderly fashion (organization stuff).

But enough of me nitpicking the story, moving on to the game itself:

The level design was awesome.

I liked the icy frozen look and details to help it look that way.

Most of the challenge comes from things shooting through the wall (which I really think maxis should look in to, but if they didn’t shoot through the wall they would probably just get stuck somewhere).

Speaking of things getting stuck somewhere a guy near the second card key almost always gets stuck, not that it matters too much as he doesn’t relate to any mission objective so I just point and laugh while I destroy the generator get the key and get out of there.

The final thing I would like to comment on is the teleporter at the end; the objective shows three places to move; and I actually slipped under a wall trying to follow the wrong one. Trying to get back in gets the character stuck on polygons so I had to start over. Guess I missed the obvious that the teleporter would be the closest one.
Overall I would rate this a 7/10. It is a great mission, but it could be better with some minor details being addressed.


THUNDER Review:
In this one he really should have the freeze attack in my opinion; energy strike (bladed knuckles) is only 25 less damage than lightning strike and it would probably go better with the story to have a freezing attack. As it is he only gets a color change and that is about it in the second one from the oh so powerful frost armor. I really think a freezing attack would make it feel more like frost armor (even if we did lose the swords that come with lightning strike).

This is probably my favorite one because green is my favorite color, and there is a lot of green here and it pulls off a rainforest feel very well. Level design definitely seems to be a strong point of yours.

This makes some things difficult to find however as everything looks so natural one can wander around a bit wondering what to destroy.

The most frustrating thing about this adventure was the platform jumping, had to hit the jumpers just right. That being said it was more of a practice thing that anything. Like I said I usually just jump really high and fly with my captains lol.

The keys were somewhat hard to find but not too bad if one took the time to look a bit.

Overall I cannot see any glaring issues with this one, other than the fact the frost armor was just a re-color with no different abilities. I give it a 9/10, on the verge of a perfect score, but I would have liked to see a slight change in the armors weapons and the platforms were somewhat hard to navigate; possibly add a couple more points of jump to them.


Short of it FROST: Frost is neat, but it could do with a bit more back story, but the level design is superb and the enemies are not too difficult unless you get too many at once; 7/10 rating from me.

Short of it THUNDER: Another well designed level, I particularly liked the mounted boss guy. The only trouble was that sometimes one could get lost in the natural scenery as it all looked pretty similar and the platforms were kind of rough; 9/10 rating from me.

okay now I owe you a review on the whole story. I was really thinking about a prequel to Frost...that wouldj provide the backstory, but I am probably going to finish up the end of the series first (or maybe not maybe I will do the Prequel, because the finale mission is going to be in several parts). I agree about everything you said about Frost, it was my first real mission so I didn't know a whole ton about the creator and what people like...so I maybe I will just remake it when I get the chance too....its a shame that Frost has more Plays than Thunder, because as of now its my best one, followed by storm of course. which has less plays than both.

I will get to your series when I have the chance which will be very soon...all in all I need some backstory, which I will provide either through a prequel to frost, or a remake.

EDIT: hey look at that the storm picture is back!

and you know what, after I make part 2 of storm I will get to work on the prequel...which i think will provide backstory along with a cool gameplay, and it will show the motives of both sides. after that I will get to the final mission (which will be somewhere along 7 parts) unless I decide to make more after my "final mission"

i played your adventure could you play my beginning of evil empire 2 adventure please the link is

http://www.spore.com/sporepedia#qry=sast-500440099435%3Assc-500436837143

playerslayer21 wrote:i played your adventure could you play my beginning of evil empire 2 adventure please the link is

http://www.spore.com/sporepedia#qry=sast-500440099435%3Assc-500436837143

read the OP you need to give me some detailed feedback

i gave you some good feedback check your creation.

playerslayer21 wrote:i gave you some good feedback check your creation.

oh ok, I saw your comment and could oyu give me a little more feedback? on this thread because when I play your adventure I am likely to give you three paragraphs of a review, so a little more feedback an your on the list